Typos, Grammar, Syntax, & Content Improvement - Megathread
Quote from JP on June 7, 2020, 9:29 pmCheers Ali!
Yeah, I'm not an English major by any means but I do quite a bit of technical writing in my job and as part of my degree. As a result, I tend to err on concision because sometimes too many words can cause confusion. This is especially true for technical information.
Cheers Ali!
Yeah, I'm not an English major by any means but I do quite a bit of technical writing in my job and as part of my degree. As a result, I tend to err on concision because sometimes too many words can cause confusion. This is especially true for technical information.
Quote from John Freeman on July 29, 2020, 7:01 pmSorry I created a new thread by mistake, I forgot about this one. Could you please delete it? I copied the content below and added a typo.
The same for age here applies: race matters more for women than for women.
I think:
race matters more for women than for men.
Right?
Then I got confused:
By now you should be able to answer why: it’s because male’s sexual market value depends on more traits.
That means that also race, same as age, gets “diluted” among all other traits more for men than for women.
Men are, on average, more looks-oriented.
And that’s why her race and his personal preferences about race matter more.
Women instead tend to care more about his race because they are, in general, pickier and more risk-averse. Women are more attuned to what others think, so if a certain skin color is considered “safe” or “high-status” in their culture, women pay even more attention to it than men.Is it men? or women who care more about race? It seem the two highlighted sentences contradict, no?
Thanks!
I also found this one : "find tour niche", instead of "your"
Sorry I created a new thread by mistake, I forgot about this one. Could you please delete it? I copied the content below and added a typo.
The same for age here applies: race matters more for women than for women.
I think:
race matters more for women than for men.
Right?
Then I got confused:
By now you should be able to answer why: it’s because male’s sexual market value depends on more traits.
That means that also race, same as age, gets “diluted” among all other traits more for men than for women.
Men are, on average, more looks-oriented.
And that’s why her race and his personal preferences about race matter more.
Women instead tend to care more about his race because they are, in general, pickier and more risk-averse. Women are more attuned to what others think, so if a certain skin color is considered “safe” or “high-status” in their culture, women pay even more attention to it than men.
Is it men? or women who care more about race? It seem the two highlighted sentences contradict, no?
Thanks!
I also found this one : "find tour niche", instead of "your"
Quote from Lucio Buffalmano on August 1, 2020, 4:47 pmThank you John!
For sure you got confused, it was confusing :).
I fixed it now:
There are two opposite effects for race when it comes to men:
1. Men can more easily overcome racial bias: that's because male's sexual market value depends on more traits.
So, same as age, it gets “diluted” among all other traits.
2. Women care more about racial biases: women are more attuned than men to what others think. So, if certain skin color is considered "attractive" or "high-status" in their culture, women pay even more attention to it than men do.That being said, once you got the facts and developed your strategies with facts in mind, my final advice on these matters is: don't give a fuck about it.
Truly don't give a fuck about it.Knowing the facts is crucial when you're developing good strategies (ie.: location where to move, strategies that fit your location, strategies for meeting more people that will appreciate your external layers, strategies for offsetting your cons, strategies for promoting your pros, etc.).
But once you've laid out your strategies, stop worrying about your "pros" and "cons" and work on doing the best with who you are.No matter who you are, some people will not find like you for who you are or how you look. And you don't need to win them over or change their mind.
Thank you again for bringing this up!
Thank you John!
For sure you got confused, it was confusing :).
I fixed it now:
There are two opposite effects for race when it comes to men:
1. Men can more easily overcome racial bias: that's because male's sexual market value depends on more traits.
So, same as age, it gets “diluted” among all other traits.
2. Women care more about racial biases: women are more attuned than men to what others think. So, if certain skin color is considered "attractive" or "high-status" in their culture, women pay even more attention to it than men do.
That being said, once you got the facts and developed your strategies with facts in mind, my final advice on these matters is: don't give a fuck about it.
Truly don't give a fuck about it.
Knowing the facts is crucial when you're developing good strategies (ie.: location where to move, strategies that fit your location, strategies for meeting more people that will appreciate your external layers, strategies for offsetting your cons, strategies for promoting your pros, etc.).
But once you've laid out your strategies, stop worrying about your "pros" and "cons" and work on doing the best with who you are.
No matter who you are, some people will not find like you for who you are or how you look. And you don't need to win them over or change their mind.
Thank you again for bringing this up!
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Quote from John Freeman on August 1, 2020, 9:42 pmYou're very welcome! Thank YOU for the added comments that wrap it all neatly together. I think these comments would deserve to be as a conclusion in the topic of the course.
You're very welcome! Thank YOU for the added comments that wrap it all neatly together. I think these comments would deserve to be as a conclusion in the topic of the course.
Quote from John Freeman on August 3, 2020, 5:36 amThat means he must enjoy the romance, but not get too lost in it. As the man, you’re the romance giver. In that romance, the giver is both a player and a conductor, so you nee
Missing text: Module 4 chapter 9
That means he must enjoy the romance, but not get too lost in it. As the man, you’re the romance giver. In that romance, the giver is both a player and a conductor, so you nee
Missing text: Module 4 chapter 9
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Quote from John Freeman on August 4, 2020, 5:18 amYou're welcome.
In the first lesson, we briefly mentioned that good also is also a trait people seek in the sexual marketplace.
Missing text: module 4 lesson 10
You're welcome.
In the first lesson, we briefly mentioned that good also is also a trait people seek in the sexual marketplace.
Missing text: module 4 lesson 10
Quote from Lucio Buffalmano on August 5, 2020, 8:55 amThank you again, John! Fixed.
Thank you again, John! Fixed.
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Quote from John Freeman on August 6, 2020, 10:11 amyou're welcome!
https://youtu.be/Qn-qYcr-RPwa
Missing link: Module 4 bonus 2
you're welcome!
Missing link: Module 4 bonus 2
Quote from Lucio Buffalmano on August 6, 2020, 11:02 amThank you John, fixed it, and this was the video example:
https://youtu.be/Qn-qYcr-RPw?t=8s
Obviously, very high risk.
But you can have the same power move, with less risk, as explained in the rest of the lesson.
Thank you John, fixed it, and this was the video example:
Obviously, very high risk.
But you can have the same power move, with less risk, as explained in the rest of the lesson.
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