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Typos, Grammar, Syntax, & Content Improvement - Megathread
Thank you, John!
Yeah, you're right.
The thing is, it's Anon's original post and generally I prefer to have a strong reason to go and edit someone else's post without prior consent.
Correct grammar is important, and so is spelling.
Still, also considering that many people read almost-correct words as if they were correct, I'd somehow wait for his return and confirm with him -he often comes and goes, so I think there will be a chance-.
If you or someone else disagree or has a different opinion, happy to read and consider.
For me, I don't mind, it's a detail. I notice it every time, but it's not bothering me. I did not notice whose thread it was, hence the feed-back (I thought it was yours). I think it's adding value, it makes the person looks better and the title is more readable. It's changing one letter, so it's not a major change. It's up to you, my intention was to help.
Quote from John Freeman on October 8, 2022, 6:06 amFor me, I don't mind, it's a detail. I notice it every time, but it's not bothering me. I did not notice whose thread it was, hence the feed-back (I thought it was yours). I think it's adding value, it makes the person looks better and the title is more readable. It's changing one letter, so it's not a major change. It's up to you, my intention was to help.
Thank you John, fair enough, you convinced me -plus Anon seems a reasonable and cool guy who is probably also OK with that-.
I fixed it now, plus added "discussion" to the title to highlight the contribution and importance of the community input in developing PU.
I fixed it now, plus added "discussion" to the title to highlight the contribution and importance of the community input in developing PU.
Great idea! Value-adding I think. :)
At https://thepowermoves.com/courses/power-university/lessons/power-university-welcome-lesson/:
a) under "The 4 Stages of Development": the infographics for stage no. 4 repeats the word "what" twice: "I often get what what I want".
b) under "Phase 1": "Most people have at least some areas where they’re fully seeing everything yet" ["they're not fully"]
BTW: in light of the "growth frame" principles, I would consider removing the mention of "the author" from this sentence.
c) under "Challenge 1": "And Power University will help you with from the very first step" ["with this from"]
d) under "Challenge 2": "And good should be good for most situations -and don’t be too wrong for all the others-." ["not be"]
a) under "3. Go In Order": "The lesson are generally laid out to go from:
- From..." [suggest removing the first "from"]
and "high-level strategies are what some may refer to as “general principles” or as the more marketing-oriented folks may even call “laws”" ["or the"]
b) under "4. Leverage...": "Think it over: what’s happening, who’s winning, the best strategies to achieved the desired results…" ["achieve"]
c) under "5.3": "these are lessons you may skip (or come back to it on a second run)." ["come back to on a"]
BOOM!
Thank you so much Bel!
Super helpful and fixed it now.
- Under 1.4: “But as long as you keep the core belief, you have the right mental framework of an empowered man /woman.” [a space between man and /]
- Under 1.6: “Will to power and personal success can -and often are– be value-adding, so you don’t need to shy away from it.” [“can be -and often are-“]
- Under 1.6: subparagraphs are numbered 5.2 and 5.3 instead of 1.6.2 and 1.6.3
- Under current 5.2: “Only when you can listen and acknowledge your dark side, you can begin to shape it.” [“listen to and”]
- Under current 5.3: “You can’t be socially powerful if all you do is hiding behind a social lie of “niceness”” [“hide”]
- Under 2.3: “Install a CCTV camera at your place” [“I” in “Install” is not bold like the rest of the letters]
- Under 4.2: “3. Middle-class, shoulders most of the work (time-wise, at least), and pays most the taxes” [“most of the taxes” or “most taxes”] and “(resources) shield you from prostituting your mind and frees you from outside authority–any outside authority.” [“free”]
BOOM!
Thank you so much, Bel, fixed it now.
Error 1
The graphic at the bottom of the page. 'Your' and 'value' are spelt incorrectly.
Error 2
https://thepowermoves.com/courses/power-university/lessons/social-success-principles/
Graphic halfway down the page - 'everyone' spelt incorrectly
