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Typos, Grammar, Syntax, & Content Improvement - Megathread

Thank you Jack, much appreciated!

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Power-protecting when people do not disrespect you can make you come across as even weaker.

Leadership Power Dynamics

you mean -not respect-

or just -disrespect-

Hi Luccio, I got a new password, cool, I was able to log in from my new laptop! hope you and everyone here are doing well.

I gave a quick read to that one and I can say that you are improving as a writer, also I was unable to detect typos apart from that one, so congratulations!

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Nothing beats a new laptop!

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Booom! Coming back with a bang, thank you Stef!

By the way, out of curiosity, would you know what made you think the articles were improving? Is it they flow better, have fewer mistakes, are clearer... ?

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The Definitive Dictionary of Power: Terms & Definitions

The “targe” can be either an individual, a social group, or society at large.
The “target” can be either an individual, a social group, or society at large.

Dark tetrad: the dark triad plus sadism. Cruelty is not a mean to an end, but a pleasurable end in itself (credits to Stefano)
Dark tetrad: the dark triad plus sadism. Cruelty is not a means to an end, but a pleasurable end in itself (credits to Stefano)

Defensive mindset: a mindset of those who focus more on the opportunities for loss and defeat, than on the possibilities of vitory and win-win.
Defensive mindset: a mindset of those who focus more on the opportunities for loss and defeat, than on the possibilities of victory and win-win.

How to Avoid Being a Social Burden

The party pooper makes things akward by being out of syng with the group’s mood.
The party pooper makes things awkward by being out of sync with the group’s mood.

However, social burdens, being socially un-intelligent, rarely manage to to improve the group’s mood.
However, social burdens, being socially un-intelligent, rarely manage to improve the group’s mood.

A great option to look around for people to talk to is to stand at the edge of a social gathering in a corner where people cannot see you. From there observe who is open to to new people and then go say hi (learn body language to make this easier).

How to Help People Out of Awkward Social Situations: A Guide


But you cannot use it when the offenseor blooper was too obvious to ignore.
But you cannot use it when the blooper was too obvious to ignore.

8 Signs of Low Value Men

Weinstein certain had some traits of a high quality man: he was great at his job, he stayed at his art until he became extremely skilled, he was great at his job, he accumulated power and riches… And yet, he miserable failed at social intelligence.

Weinstein certain had some traits of a high quality man: he was great at his job, he stayed at his art until he became extremely skilled, he accumulated power and riches… And yet, he miserably failed at social intelligence.

But excessively nice guys do are low value men.
But excessively nice guys are low value men.

Relationships’ Four Horsemen The Apocalypse: Video Examples

To fix criticism, the fir horseman of the apocalypse, use “I” sentences and only complain about specific situations instead of generalizing about your partner’s defects.

To fix criticism, the first horseman of the apocalypse, use “I” sentences and only raise specific situations instead of generalizing the partner’s defects.

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Also I've noticed there is a significant no. of youtube links that are broken at this point in time.

 

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Thank you so much Jack!

This is super helpful!

Quote from Jack Leśniewski on October 14, 2021, 9:49 pm

Also I've noticed there is a significant no. of youtube links that are broken at this point in time.

Unluckily, that's the risk of using video examples from YouTube.

Between not using video examples and using them, I still choose to, though.

One because the majority of video stays around for a long time, and two because people can search for the youtube URL if they're interested and possibly find alternative sources for the videos (but it requires some tech skills).
And three, because it's also possible that one day there might be some editors here to make sure that everything is up to date.

To address the worst-case scenarios of deleted videos, in the new articles and updates I'm also adding dialogue transcripts. That way the example can still work somehow even without the video. Plus people can more easily find the original video via the transcript, if they want.

Finally, for great and important examples as well as for core articles and Power University I have either saved the video, or downloaded it and re-uploaded it to my channel.

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Yes, fewer mistakes is a part of it, however, it is mostly about the enjoyment I got from your use of the English-language, sentence structures, word choices,  etc.

As a non-native speaker it has a flavor of its own and when you are able to masterfully convey an idea it is more impressive, as I am sure many native speakers would not be able to express it at that level.

I would add that if you desire to improve even more in that regard, literature (the classics) is the way to go, especially literary or poetic prose, books like that really help with developing an elegant style and effective ways of communication.

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Yes, fewer mistakes is a part of it, however, it is mostly about the enjoyment I got from your use of the English-language, sentence structures, word choices,  etc.

As a non-native speaker it has a flavor of its own and when you are able to masterfully convey an idea it is more impressive, as I am sure many native speakers would not be able to express it at that level.

I would add that if you desire to improve even more in that regard, literature (the classics) is the way to go, especially literary or poetic prose, books like that really help with developing an elegant style and effective ways of communication.

Thank you so much for the feedback + advice Stef, very helpful.

I've also noticed a step forward especially when going through older articles and finding easy ways to improve them.

My earlier writing was more "stream of consciousness". That pushed much of the meaning-making work onto the reader, and made articles harder, less enjoyable, and even less useful.

I think part of the improvement was based on the questions I asked myself over time, such as:

  • How can I make this clearer & simpler to understand (N.1 question)
  • How can I make this briefer and cut unnecessary words and verbs
  • How can I say it more in the positive and less in the negative (ie.: "do this" rather than "don't do Y")
  • How can I say with it active voice (rather than passive)
  • How can I better structure and organize information to make it simpler and more flowing (what goes first, what comes next, what goes last)
  • How can I use more descriptive paragraphs

Etc.

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Quote from Jack Leśniewski on October 14, 2021, 9:49 pm

Also I've noticed there is a significant no. of youtube links that are broken at this point in time.

P.S.:

If you guys notice any missing video which you think were important do also post it here.

Happy to find more reliable sources for that same video (maybe back it up) and to add the dialogues beneath it.

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I think there are also a lot of different threads:

  • Typos, grammar, syntax
  • Forum rules
  • Feedbacks & clarifications
  • Power University updates

Sometimes I find that confusing.

Video-wise, I need to handle this issue as well by not relying totally on YouTube for the new course.
Currently, I put the videos on Notion and link them to my Google Drive.

There's another option which is embedding Google Drive videos with HTML embed code (<iframe>):

How to Embed a Video from Google Drive

I've also noticed a step forward especially when going through older articles and finding easy ways to improve them.

My earlier writing was more "stream of consciousness". That pushed much of the meaning-making work onto the reader, and made articles harder, less enjoyable, and even less useful.

This is the main issue with the current email marketing and social media marketing too in my opinion.

I believe making the articles easier to understand from the user's perspective will naturally improve the persuasiveness of the articles without putting much extra effort into "marketing push".

That's what Ali and I talk about the lack of a bridge under the thread:
The Challenges of Marketing ThePowerMoves

Probably this will help in affiliate marketing as well.


Aside from all this, I personally find it easier to churn out content and worry about how it comes across later on.

Worrying too much about "marketing" initially can detract from the content production and work itself.

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